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There is a sickness, a fatal disease
an illness inside that nobody sees
bit by bit, it eats away at your heart
completely tearing you apart
you'll know when it's about to begin
you'll feel like your chest is caving in
it never sleeps, it never dies
it feeds off fragile and innocent lives
you can try your very best
but know that it will never rest
it makes you weak, it makes you sad
it makes you cut, it drives you mad
you'll never escape it, you'll never be free
and I know for a fact cuz the sickness killed me



-Ashley Carver
This is the second collab I have done with He did the art. See how incredibly talented he is:) thanks Jonathan you did an awesome job:hug:
Poem by me:D
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Sniper0092 Featured By Owner Aug 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Nice.
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ichisluv1 Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2010
Nice sonnet! Its really difficult to write sonnets... Is this shakespearean?
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iPsychoKitteh Featured By Owner Apr 11, 2010
I love it. It reminded me of love. Wonderful piece.
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Lyris-siryl Featured By Owner Jul 12, 2009
This is frickin' brilliant! One of the best poems I've read in a while now.
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UnFunnyJester Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
nicely written
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occasion-bitch Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
The flow of this is excellent and it really suits the image as well
:+fav:
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AlkalineTrioGirl Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2009
i would suggest using 'for' in the place of 'cuz' on the last line, but i like it.
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nikkiswimmer Featured By Owner May 16, 2008
I never thought it would be so possible for a stranger to describe exactly who I am and how I feel.
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emcstyle Featured By Owner May 23, 2007
Very good!
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spysays Featured By Owner May 22, 2007   Writer
if I commented what would it take for you to reply?
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mistyvision Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2006
oh my gosh, i luv this *adding u 2 :+fave: * beautiful
:heart: Kendall
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flowerstorm Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2006
wonderful poem
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MoonLightSky Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2006   Writer
what a wonderful poem . i love it
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Num1Noodle Featured By Owner Mar 25, 2006
Now this is wonderfly rhymed. I love how it just rolls off the tounge. This is probably the best I've seen. Great job, if you keep writing I'll keep reading! Keep it up! *Faves*
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DemonINveins Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2006   Photographer
wonderful
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dangerousdelighter Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2006
OMGOSH! I love the last line... it gave me chills.... tee hee.... you're goood!!! :clap:

:hug: :headbang:
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MyFriendsAreDorks Featured By Owner Dec 21, 2005
this poem is amazing, it expresses so many feelings that i can relate to
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Forbiddenynforgotten Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
It conveys so much...it's very good...I hope you don't mind, but I added it to my favourites (first one yet actually). :)
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skinnylittleschizo Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't mind at all, thank you:)
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SoulxFire Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2005
Great poem! ...Only thing that bothers me, maybe capitalize when you start a new line?

"Bit by bit, it eats away at your heart
completely tearing you apart
You'll know when it's about to begin"


Only thing I have to say, either way, nicely written :)

Definite :+fav:
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Maggical Featured By Owner Sep 27, 2005
Like your style... the lines are amazing...

Maggical
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My-Shadows-Limit Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2005
wow, sad poem. but very well written =)
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fractalspirit Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2005   Digital Artist
I love the drawings the most... very surreal... really =D ^_^
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TheGreatNinjaRikku Featured By Owner Jun 26, 2005
this is an awseome poem! i also love the drawing
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shadowofeternity Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2005
great poem but i think the lines

bit by bit, it eats away at your heart
completely tearing you apart

kinda messed the rhythm up...
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skinnylittleschizo Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
depends how you read it:)
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shadowofeternity Featured By Owner Jun 24, 2005
thats true...=)
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midnightangel101 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2005
your poem is really good. i liked it alot. the pic is kool too. i like them.
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skinnylittleschizo Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you:heart:
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chemicalpaperclip Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2005   Writer
oh woooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooowww wwwww
:trophy: love love it love it WELL DONE DUDE
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cryingangel18 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2005
Amazing
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2ecneuqeS Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2005
Your shit is amazing as it is....I always find it hard to understand when the comment of people contains things to change or mistake lol theres no such thingh lol you like or you dont like you dont modify to fit syour.......What I mean Is Great job and I dont think nobody gives a fuck If theres no Cap letter or Bs details lol aart is art and U GOT IT :)
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skinnylittleschizo Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
hehe thanks:)
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2ecneuqeS Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2005
:pc: :)
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yet2bforsaken Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2005   Writer
Well done over all.. but i thionk with more detail and length it could make the eerie ending more and more effective. good job ^_^
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skinnylittleschizo Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks:)
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vincentvega-1985 Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2005
awesome!!!
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TheBoogeyMan Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2005
Love the pick and the poem...:lick:
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skinnylittleschizo Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
lol thanks:D
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TheBoogeyMan Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2005
oh yeah...:lick:
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polawat Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2005   Digital Artist
Really good poem I like it very much....so this is my first :+fav: on poetry.
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skinnylittleschizo Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you:hug:
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simondo Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2005
the poem and artwork collide with each other in a creative explosion which is very powerful...dunno where that came from:Slol

fantastic poem, amazing artwork, works well together-congratulations :D!!
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skinnylittleschizo Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you:D :hug:
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claremanson Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2005  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
great picture.
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rhorn Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2005   Writer
Nice. It flows really well, and the imagery (of the poem itself, though the preview pic is cool too) isn't too bad either.
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punishethz Featured By Owner Mar 10, 2005
yeah, it's splendid
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Your-Canadian-Angel Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2005  Student Writer
I like it! Very well written (dont let the negative comments get you down) I love the artwork too, goes along perfectly with the poem! keep up the good work!! :D *favs*
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skinnylittleschizo Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2005  Hobbyist General Artist
thank you:hug:
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Your-Canadian-Angel Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2005  Student Writer
You're welcome!! :D
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