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Broken Promises,
Lie after lie
All I ever wanted
Was for you to try

Broken dreams,
And memories
Pain so deep
That no one sees

Broken heart,
I can't repair
All I ever wanted
Was for you to care
Did the poem and the art both tonight.

The girl in the photo is me and the original photo will be in my stock gallery soon.

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B R O K E N

Broken Promises,
Lie after lie
All I ever wanted
Was for you to try

Broken dreams,
And memories
Pain so deep
That no one sees

Broken heart,
I can't repair
All I ever wanted
Was for you to care
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xselenaraex Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2008
love it
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love-runner Featured By Owner Jul 24, 2008
Wow...this is emotional. Very nice shot. I really do love.
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PsychoSlaughterman Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2007  Professional General Artist
i love both the picture and your writing
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mistyvision Featured By Owner Jun 1, 2006
sad, i like it a lot
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jasje-joes Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2006   Traditional Artist
*sniffle*
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Mykemicalfailur Featured By Owner Mar 20, 2006
=( so sad. But I love it. Very nice. :clap:
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wishfull-sin Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2006
i like it, no i love it... simple yet so complicated, can really feel the emotions...
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killumall Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2006
I kind of agree with ~milpalabras, there.
You've got:
talent.
a great subject.
rhyming skill.
a sense of rhythm.
In my opinion, make your lines a bit longer to bring out the rhythm. Think it out more. A great subject, but it seems kinda like only a surface brush on the feelings. Think of some metaphors or analogies.
I'm tellin you this because I see an okay poem that could be excellent.
Work on it! :clap: a good beginning!
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killumall Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2006
sorry, i realize that. great art on the piece, btw. :P
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skinnylittleschizo Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2006  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks, I probably shoud've submitted it as art instead of poetry, they were both done in about 10 minutes each. I just wrote the poem quick because I needed something to go with the art lol.
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